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Your Eyes 2 by ~SweeneyLives:iconSweeneyLives:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Spiritual > Open


There's something wrong with your eyes.
They are not your own.
They are not your sparkling, shining eyes.
No, these eyes are different.
These eyes are clouded,
They are silent.
They tell no stories,
They share no light.
Your eyes are paired with a smile,
While these are paired with a single straight line.
I do not like these eyes,
That have embelished themselves upon your face.
I'd rather see your eyes,
The one's that shine,
The ones I love,
Smiling back at me.
©2008-2009 ~SweeneyLives
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Author's Comments

eyes are beutiful no matter what

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~Angels-Nocturne May 16, 2008, 2:06:53 AM
omg eyes!!! i seriously find them the most defining thing about a person (well apart from personality... you get it)
this is fabulous it love it ^-^

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you can fool yourself, i promise it will help!
now every single day, i just wanna hear you say:
im so lucky lucky! im so lucky lucky!
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~SweeneyLives May 16, 2008, 5:28:10 PM
thanx. eyes r like, the first thing i look at before i meet or talk to someone. i thought of this 1 cuz of my boyfriend. we we're sittin' @ this park, and he got all sad and wouldn't talk 2 me.he looked like he was about 2 cry 2. :'( (single tear)

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98% of teenagers have molested a lemur. if you are one of the 2% who haven't, copy and paste this as your signature
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~Angels-Nocturne May 16, 2008, 5:33:01 PM
that so sad is he ok?.
me too ^-^ i find that eyes are the first thing i look at too!

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you can fool yourself, i promise it will help!
now every single day, i just wanna hear you say:
im so lucky lucky! im so lucky lucky!
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~SweeneyLives May 16, 2008, 11:56:19 PM
yeah, i found out that same night he was just like, 'thinking' about stuff like ppl he cares about and stuff. i almost dried!!!! after i went home,(i had 2 b in early) he said he was just gonna sit there a ehile or something(there were none that night btw) i didn't want 2 go, but i had 2. now he lives w/ his mom, and i won't c him 4 two weeks! y gog, y!!!!???? oh, so terribly depressed am i.

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98% of teenagers have molested a lemur. if you are one of the 2% who haven't, copy and paste this as your signature
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~cutxhere May 17, 2008, 2:21:56 PM
wow really nicely done! although, "embelished" kinda gives an odd feeling, maybe something like "planted" would be better (but that sounds kinda lame so idk, haha) great poem though, really

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"I know nothing with any certainty but the sight of stars makes me dream..." -Vincent Van Gogh
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~SweeneyLives May 19, 2008, 7:58:28 PM
yeah, i had trouble finded a word for there. i thuoght of impustered themselves, but that didn't sound right

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98% of teenagers have molested a lemur. if you are one of the 2% who haven't, copy and paste this as your signature
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~SweeneyLives Dec 18, 2008, 10:46:42 AM
wow...i can't believe zoe fave'd this.....wow

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98% of teenagers have molested a lemur. if you are one of the 2% who haven't, copy and paste this as your signature
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